Query Hack: Critique #17 – Adult Thriller

Dear Query Hack, SOUVENIR is an adult thriller complete at 101K words. A Jewish-American attorney in Atlanta, Hannah jumps at the chance to close a highly lucrative deal in Syria. It was supposed to be a seventy-two hour trip resulting in a promotion. But the allure of the Old City of Damascus, its ancient Souk … Continue reading Query Hack: Critique #17 – Adult Thriller

Query Hack: Critique #16 – YA Contemporary

Dear Query Hack, Lulu is the girl with all the answers. She has to be. It’s the only way to keep from being crushed by her parents’ wàng nǔ chéng féng—hope their daughter become a phoenix. You know, provided she were allowed to fall into any ashes in the first place. If only there was … Continue reading Query Hack: Critique #16 – YA Contemporary

Query Hack: Critique #15 – Adult Thriller

Dear Query Hack, Peter Poole finds himself in the afterlife as the newest contestant on The American Afterlife Network’s biggest show, Who’s Your Murderer?!. In order to find out who killed him, Peter must relive key memories of his life via the network’s Magical Memory Machine. The clock is ticking: by the end of the … Continue reading Query Hack: Critique #15 – Adult Thriller

Query Hack: Critique #14 – MG Urban Fantasy

Dear Query Hack, Obsessed with his father’s murder, Leonidas discovers he’s a descendant of the legendary monster hunter Abraham van Helsing. And therefore, a target of the monsters responsible for his dad’s death. Neato story premise! I like that we're quickly acquainted with Leonidas' abilities/family history, but I found myself wanting a hook about Leonidas … Continue reading Query Hack: Critique #14 – MG Urban Fantasy

Query Hack: Critique #13 – Picture Book

Dear Query Hack, I'd like to present SOUNDS LIKE HOME, a 470 word picture book, about an immigrant child who feels lost and alone in her new surroundings, until she plays her flute. Awesome story concept! However, be careful of your punctuation. This first sentence should read: "I'd like to present SOUNDS LIKE HOME, a … Continue reading Query Hack: Critique #13 – Picture Book